"post-grunge assisted beat" -> "beat influenced by post-grunge". "atmospheric" right before "slow jam" (remove the hyphen). "bass-heavy" should probably be… something else, something more formal. "atmospheric production, a sultry swirl of synths…". "lurching banger with a creepy, hypnotic beat". with its sonic shifts and "hazy" atmosphere." If someone specifically wrote that the song was "hazy", it might be worth mentioning who it was by name and for which publication they wrote. "The streak of rap songs is broken up" -> "All the songs up to "NY (Ned Flander)" are rap songs, but the one that follows, "Ya Know", is not, as it is more reminiscent of the band N.E.R.D. Could live with this one, but if there's a more formal equivalent to "off-kilter", please use it. Unless some of these are direct quotations from the given sources (in which case some will need quote marks, others will need to be paraphrased) here are some words and phrases I found that must be replaced: 和DITOR E tails 22:13, 12 October 2013 (UTC) Reply I think it would be too much if I added more background info on their formation and development of mixtakes, so I'll leave it alone. Also, I'm prepared for this section to remain brief, but could you possibly add anything else? It won't hurt the possible GA status if you don't, but it couldn't hurt either. Fixed 和DITOR E tails 22:13, 12 October 2013 (UTC) Reply. I think the plural verbs would work best here given the use of the word "their". However, I notice the group " is known for their frequent collaborations" but " have released mixtapes together". I know some people refer to groups with singular verbs, others (like myself) with plural (funny considering that, to my knowledge, is the traditional British usage and I've never even been to Britain). Removed 和DITOR E tails 22:13, 12 October 2013 (UTC) Reply. "…during their promotional tours" This statement is unnecessary. Rewrite 和DITOR E tails 22:13, 12 October 2013 (UTC) Reply. "The album spawned four singles, all of which received music videos:…". 
I'm not sure, but I've changed it to overly."over-the-top" Is this word okay for an encyclopedia?.Done 和DITOR E tails 22:13, 12 October 2013 (UTC) Reply.和DITOR E tails 21:04, 12 October 2013 (UTC) Reply Lead It may take a bit for me to respond, since I'm doing expansion of the article Hold Your Fire, but I promise I'll fix em as soon as possible. I should have something here by the end of the day.
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